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13 June 2024

The Superman Trilogy: Part I – The Last Son of Krypton (Fragment + Treatment)

A decade ago, I began working on a script for The Last Son of Krypton, the first part of a trilogy focusing on Clark Kent's upbringing in Smallville, his activities during the Great Depression, and his first year as Superman in the early-to-mid 20th century.


It's been almost three years since I last updated this script. When my previous laptop died in November 2022, I lost a chunk of the screenplay I was still working on, throwing me into a tizzy. And ADHD and depression have long been demotivators in my life, with the latter getting worse since my mother died. I fully intended to get back to work on it, but life's been hurtling barrage after barrage of hardships on me ever since and I've never been able to get back into a constructive headspace. So I've decided to make it official: progress on this screenplay's on indefinite hiatus.

For my long-suffering readers who've had to bear with constant revisions and a dearth of updates, it's not fair that they don't get to know where I intended to go with this and the rest of my Superman trilogy. Below's an outline covering where I intended to go with this screenplay. I'll do my best to summarize my ideas for the rest of the trilogy in a follow-up post.

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Luthor makes the trip to the fertilizer plant. As he touches base with Vale then visits Subject One in her cell, we learn more about Subject One. The same time Clark's stasis matrix arrived in Smallville, hers touched down in the East Coast, crashing and causing a devastating fire in a munitions factory owned by Luthor Incorporated. The matrix was found undamaged and Subject One retrieved soon after, whereupon she was taken into captivity and subjected to scientific observation/experimentation. While not a constant presence in her life, Luthor's the only person she knows who's shown her any affection, having given her gifts on the occasions he's visited her in the past. It's obvious,  however, that Luthor's tenderness is purely performative, the ruse of a charismatic manipulator, that the gifts he's given her — mostly in the form of books authored by figures such as Hobbes and Poe — were curated to make her subservient to him and fearful of the outside world.

Through guilt-tripping and bribery, Luthor wheedles out of Subject One knowledge of her super-hearing. He then tells her of the stasis matrix, the disc found within it, and his desire to learn their secrets, persuading her to interact with them and pass on anything they reveal to him. Under controlled conditions, Subject One's taken to the laboratory housing her matrix and given the disc. Upon finding a niche the exact shape/size of the disc in the matrix's side, she inserts it. Upon doing so, she's thrown back, suffering a violent seizure which leaves her catatonic. Vale performs a cerebral angiography on Subject One, but the underlying cause of her condition eludes them. Luthor orders Subject One fitted with a feeding tube and placed under observation until further tests can be arranged. Unbeknownst to her keepers, Subject One's feigning her affliction. No longer periodically exposed to red kryptonite, her powers gradually return in 72 hours. Then using her x-ray vision to map the layout of the plant, she speedily neutralizes her guards, retrieves the disc, and escapes.

Using her disc as a homing device, Subject One makes the trek from Metropolis to Smallville. Along the way, she crosses paths with a gas trucker who attempts to sexually assault her. Brutally disabling him, she tears his truck apart in a fit of rage, causing a tremendous explosion. The conflagration incinerates her clothing but leaves her unscathed.

Clark pursues his relationship with Helen in secret. Though neither his schoolwork nor chores suffer, he neglects his friendship with Lana and Pete, who've started dating. The amount of time he spends with Helen also draws Jonathan's ire, who's suspicious of Helen's intentions.

Subject One arrives in Smallville. She follows the disc to the Kent farm and begins discretely spying on the Kents. It isn't long before she learns Clark's the one she's looking for.

Early one morning, just before sunrise, Kenny pays Clark a visit. Frantic, he tells Clark that he shot and killed his father and needs Clark's help disposing of the body and gun. Clark reluctantly accompanies Kenny into the woods with the corpse. As Kenny begins digging the grave, Clark changes his mind about helping him, urging Kenny to turn himself in to the police. As the two boys argue, Subject One, who's been tailing them, reveals herself. Taken by surprise, Kenny reflexively fires at the naked girl. Uninjured but angered, she grabs Kenny's gun hand, crushing both, but Clark's able to talk her down before she can do him any worse harm. Clark takes Subject One back to the farm, leaving her in the care of his parents while he goes back for Kenny. He finds Kenny back at his home where he prevents him from committing suicide, revealing his powers in the process. The sheriff arrives and takes a bewildered Kenny into custody.

With the Kents, Subject One's clothed and fed. Though claiming to have amnesia, she recalls that her name's Mala. Initially reserved around Martha and Jonathan, Mala warms up to them the more time she spends with them — helping Jonathan with firewood, receiving a haircut from Martha, etc. — though only truly relaxes when alone with Clark.

After Lana catches Helen and Clark in bed together, Clark confides in her that his relationship with her aunt's purely physical and emotionally unfulfilling. He stops seeing Helen shortly thereafter.

As Thanksgiving approaches, Helen invites the Kents to join her and her sister's family at her house for Thanksgiving dinner. Mala, passed off as a distant relative, accompanies them. Upon meeting Helen, Mala takes an immediate disliking to her. After Helen pressures Clark to assist her in the kitchen, the dinner commences. Helen immediately acts passive-aggressively toward her guests, with especial attention given to Clark and Jonathan, the gibes and innuendoes growing less passive and more aggressive as time presses on. Tensions mount until finally Helen shoves a pecan pie — which Martha's allergic to — in Martha's face. Pandemonium ensues. Screaming at Clark that he's just like his father, Helen slaps him across the face, breaking her hand in the process. Mala grabs Helen by the throat, holding her aloft, choking her until the others persuade her to drop her. Falling to her knees, Helen breaks down crying.

Later that night, back at the farm, Clark and Jonathan have a private conversation in the barn. Jonathan reveals to Clark that he had an affair with Helen years ago. Sad and angry at Martha's inability to have children, he went to bed with Helen out of spite. But when Clark entered their lives, Jonathan and Martha were able to reconnect and his love for her was restored. He immediately ended things with Helen, but never told Martha of his infidelity. Clark advises his father that the time's come to tell her. Jonathan agrees and goes inside. From the barn, Clark spies Jonathan telling Martha everything. She's heartbroken.

Mala joins Clark in the barn and they have a brief conversation on human nature; her appraisal's decidedly cynical while his is cautiously optimistic. She then confides in him, revealing that she was never amnesiac. She tells him of her life imprisoned, of the years subjected to cold, clinical experiments devised by amoral scientists, that the little love she received was false, that she was never given a name, only a number. Then she tells him she does have a name: Mala-Sonn, genetic offspring of Sela-Sonn and Dax-Ur. She tells him of Krypton, doomed to explode, and the Kryptonians, genetically bound to their planet, doomed to perish with it. She tells him that she and he were of 144,000 Kryptonian supermen genetically engineered to live free of Krypton and thrive as gods on Earth. Taking Clark's hands in hers, she levitates them off the ground, revealing that she's capable of flight. She tells Clark it's time he learned who he is and accept his destiny.

Clark and Mala visit his stasis matrix, disc in hand. He asks Mala what the "S" stands for. She tells him it's had many meanings across the millennia — it's been a Raoist religious icon, a family crest for the great houses, a symbol for hope. Over and above all, it represents Krypton itself. Inserting the disc into its niche, Clark's greeted by an AI gatekeeper, the Voice of Rao. The Voice touches Clark's brow, and in an instant Clark's bequeathed with understanding of Kryptonian languages, technology, history, and his own identity; he's Kal-El, genetic offspring of Jor-El and Lara-Van. The stasis matrix then transmogrifies into a pedestal which transport Clark and Mala across the world to the Fortress of Solitude in Antarctica. Accessing the Fortress' computer, Mala brings up a display of Earth marking the whereabouts of all the stasis matrices across the globe. Mala tells Clark that they must seek out their brethren, then together reshape humanity according to proper Kryptonian ways. Clark tells her that for all he's discovered of his heritage, none of it defines him. Krypton may've bred and bore him, but Earth made him who he is. He'll always cherish the memories of Krypton given to him, but he won't be party to colonialism. He urges Mala to come back with him to Smallville to think things through. Mala hesitantly agrees.

Spring 1935. A drought's come to Smallville and the Kent farm's not fairing well. During a conversation with Clark, Mala remarks that with the Fortress' resources, they could put this drought to an end.

One weekend, Clark goes into town to hang out with Lana and Pete at the general store. It's a blustery day, but it gets worse as a twister forms. Tearing through the Kent farm, it doesn't hit the house, though it obliterates the crops and sweeps Mala up into it. The twister then moves toward town. Clark wants to stay and help, but Lana and Pete pull him with them for cover. Meanwhile, Mala emerges unscathed from the whirlwind and gets to work swooping folks out of danger. In the aftermath, Clark laments on how he could've done more if only he had her power of flight. Mala responds by saying he possesses all the same powers she has; its only his insecurities holding him back.

The story of the "guardian angel" who saved people from the twister appears in the Smallville town newspaper, accompanied by an unclear photo of Mala in flight. Luthor catches wind of the story and comes to the conclusion that Mala's hiding somewhere in Smallville. Luthor then gets the idea to reach out to all the linguists he consulted eighteen years ago to decipher the Kryptonian script on Mala's key to learn if any of them have connections to Smallville. His search leads him to Frederick Walden, a grammatologist who refused to work with Luthor. Walden passed away years ago, but his landlady held onto all his correspondence, which she allows Luthor to keep. Reading through the letters, Luthor learns Walden briefly corresponded with Jonathan in regards to the same Kryptonian script.

Luthor sends his men to the Kent farm. Equipped with red kryptonite, they nullify Clark and Mala's powers and take them and Jonathan and Martha into custody. Back at the fertilizer plant, the prisoners are brought before Luthor. Luthor gives Mala an ultimatum: she'll give up all her secrets or he'll have the Kents shot and Clark dissected. Reunited with her stasis matrix, Mala inserts her key, transporting her, Vale, and several technicians and armed guards to the Fortress of Solitude. At gunpoint, Mala leads her captors to the nucleus of the Fortress. Activating the computer, she neutralizes the red kryptonite radiation in her system. Her abilities restored, she massacres Vale and the others. Outfitting herself in a suit of body armour, Mala transports back to the fertilizer plant. Shielded from the red kryptonite of Luthor's guards' weapons, she tears through them, rescuing the Kents. She then corners Luthor, taunting him as she powers up her suit's wrist-mounted blaster. Telling Luthor to burn, she fires a particle beam into him, right through his spine, setting him ablaze.

Mala and the Kents return to Smallville. Having ditched the body armour, Mala talks with Clark in the barn. She informs him matter-of-factly that she has every intention of using the Fortress' resources to track down the other Kryptonians and subjugate humanity, that he'd better help her or stay out of her way. They get into a brutal fight. Bringing the barn down on top of them, their battle takes them clear across the ravaged Kent property, all the way outside town limits. There, Clark barely manages to defeat Mala, punching her unconscious.

When Mala regains consciousness, she finds herself back in the Fortress, contained within a force field. Clark's there to tell her that he's used the time to familiarize himself with the Fortress computer; he's created a computer virus which'll shut the Fortress down for good. Mala pleads for him not to do this, but despite her cries and his own reluctance, Clark follows through. As the systems running the Fortress crash, the force field imprisoning Mala winks out. Clark's resigned to resume their fight if that's what Mala wants. Though fuming, she remarks there's no point to that now. Using the last of the Fortress' power, Clark and Mala transport back to Smallville. She informs him that the time's come for them to go their separate ways. She has the general locations of the other stasis matrices memorized, and she'll seek out the other Kryptonians in due time. She'll convince as many as she can to join her, and even without the Fortress to aid them they'll conquer Earth; in that time to come, Clark'll be made to pay in full for what he's done.

Weeks pass. Their farm heading toward failure, Jonathan and Martha consider their options: taking out a loan they're uncertain they'll be able to pay back or cutting their losses and selling their property. Clark and his schoolmates graduate. Clark writes to Kenny, who's in prison. Back in Metropolis, Luthor's revealed to still be alive but in a coma, kept breathing in an iron lung.

This chapter draws to a close with Clark and Lana walking together through the countryside on a moonlit summer night. Clark finally opens up to Lana, confessing his love for her and his desire to begin a romantic relationship. Lana reveals her own feelings for him and her desire to reciprocate. Clark then admits that he's been keeping secrets from her, that they can't be together until he's told her everything. Scooping Lana up in his arms, Clark leaps into the sky, taking them one-eighth of a mile across the countryside. Lana's flabbergasted.

15 November 2021

The Legend of Zelda: Season One (Treatment)

I've only ever played Ocarina of Time, Majora's Mask, and a tiny bit of A Link to the Past, but I've always liked the world of The Legend of Zelda, so recently I've started delving more into the lore of the series, reading the mangas and watching walkthroughs on YouTube to beef up my knowledge. That inevitably got me to thinking how I'd go about adapting the games, either into a movie or a series. I decided TLOZ would work best in the form of a series. Then I started thinking about narrative and characterization. To me, OOT's quintessential TLOZ, but I wouldn't want to make this series a mere adaptation of that one game. I decided I'd use OOT as the basic template, keeping to the main beats, but including elements from other games/my own imagination as desired.

The following's a treatment for the first season, with character bios, lore, and the general plot.

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TRIFORCE

According to the Hylian creation myth, the Triforce was created by the Triune Goddess after the foundation of the world, though its true antiquity and origins are ultimately unknown. The Triforce consists of three tetrahedrons of golden crystal: the Triforce of Power, the Triforce of Wisdom, and the Triforce of Courage. Each Triforce capable of bestowing immense power in its own right,  the combined Triforce can make its bearer a living god, though only someone balanced in power, wisdom, and courage can weild all three directly; the Triforce separates when apprehended by an unbalanced soul, two of the three Triforces dispersing to find hosts which embody their qualities.

Coveted by the ruthless and ambitious, the Triforce was the cause of many terrible wars and dynasties. To prevent further misuse, the Seven Sages sealed the Triforce away in the Dark World many centuries ago. The only entrance to the Dark World is in the Temple of Time, located deep in the Lost Woods. The gate's kept sealed by the Master Sword, which can only be drawn from its pedestal by a hero with a pure heart.

HYRULEAN CIVIL WAR

The Hyrulean Civil War was a series of armed conflicts fought amongst the kingdoms of the Hyrulean subcontinent. Instigated by the Hylian king Rhoam and perpetuated by his son Harkinian, it lasted several decades, ending with the unification of the realm under the Hylian banner. The Gorons, Rito, and Zora became vassals of the Hylians, while the Bokogoblins, Gerudo, Lizalfos, Molblins, etc. were hunted to near-extinction and dispossessed of their lands.

GANON


Ganon was born fifty-nine years before the end of the Hyrulean Civil War. His people, the Gerudo, had made their home on the Great Plateau, a lush and fertile land which had been coveted by the Hylians for ages long before the war. After the Gerudo were brought to heel, King Rhoam decreed that all Gerudo males and pregnant women be put to the sword, the surviving females exiled to the inhospitable desert to the west. Ganon's mother died with him still in her womb, but by a stroke of fate, he survived to be found by the twin sorceresses, Kotake and Koume. Raising him in secret away from even their fellow Gerudo, the sisters instructed him in their art, grooming him to become the Gerudo messiah.

At the appropriate age, Ganon took his place as leader of the Gerudo. Under his stewardship, the withering group of nomads settled in an uninhabited valley, where they were reforged into a tight-knit tribe of woman-warriors, taking what they needed in raids on the outlying settlements of the Hyrulean Empire. All the while Ganon remained in the shadows, content to let his favourite wife serve as figurehead until the time was ripe to reveal his existence to their enemies.

After Rhoam's death, long into the war, Ganon made his move. Making himself known to the Hylians, he travelled to Hyrule Castle. Kneeling before King Harkinian, he beseeched him for vassalage, offering his very life in exchange for peace between their peoples. His charisma won Harkinian over, earning the Gerudo his blessing. Following the Hyrulean Civil War, Ganon maintained the facade of a loyal vassal, but began brokering alliances with the marginalized peoples of Hyrule in secret, sowing the seeds of the Imprisoning War.

LINK


The Hylian boy Link was born towards the end of the Hyrulean Civil War. Orphaned when he was three years old, he was found in Faron Woods by the Deku, who sheltered him, raising him collectively. Essentially a feral child with only the mute Deku and telepathic/empathic Faeries of the forest for companions, Link lost whatever speech he had acquired from his parents, becoming mute. At the age of nine, Link was found by Talon, a rancher from Ordon Village. Befriending the boy, Talon took Link back with him to Lon Lon Ranch to raise alongside his two-year-old daughter, Malon.

When Link was sixteen, the Imprisoning War broke out. Drafted into the Hyrulean Forces, Link was shipped out to Central Hyrule, where he began his training at the castle as a soldier.

ZELDA



Princess Zelda grew up isolated on the grounds of Hyrule Castle. Raised largely by her caretaker, Impa, Zelda was totally unlike her indolent/indifferent parents. A precocious child, with an interest in the world beyond the castle walls, at the age of thirteen she began sneaking out of the castle, mixing with the common people under the alias "Tetra".

IMPRISONING WAR

Ganon learned of the Triforce from his surrogate mothers at a young age. He knew the talisman would grant him the power to liberate the subjugated races of Hyrule and establish a just new order. To gain access to the Temple of Time, he needed to first procure the Spiritual Stones to the sealed chamber housing the Master Sword. The Stone of Fire was with the Gorons, the Stone of Water with the Zora, and the Stone of Forest with the Royal Family of Hyrule. 

After befriending Darunia, the Goron king, Ganon was gifted the Stone of Fire. Darunia dispatched his warriors to the Zora domain to attain the Stone of Water. Harkinian sent two-thirds of his forces to assist the Zora, leaving a third behind to protect Central Hyrule. This was the opportunity Ganon had been biding his time for. With Harkinian's blessing, Ganon brought his forces to Hyrule Castle, ostensibly to reinforce the Hylian troops in the event of invasion. The Hylians were betrayed. The Gerudo staged a coup, smashing the Hylian defense and killing the king and queen. Impa, Zelda, a few knights, and a handful of trainees, including Link, escaped.

After the fall of the Zora, Ganon finally had all three Spiritual Stones in his possession. Now only the Lost Woods stood between him and the Triforce. The refugees from Hyrule Castle split into two camps; Impa would go alone with Zelda to a place of safety, leaving Link and the rest to stop Ganon at the Temple of Time.

Neither Link nor his comrades were able to prevent Ganon from penetrating the Temple of Time. With greater skills and experience, Ganon beat the boy to within an inch of his life. In a last-ditch effort to stop the Gerudo, Link grasped the hilt of the Master Sword and pulled it free, unsealing the portal to the Dark World. They were transported to the Temple of Light, finding themselves on a stone platform raised over a yawning abyss, the Triforce waiting on another platform across from them. Link came at Ganon with the Master Sword, but the Gerudo easily swatted him aside, casting the boy to the void below. Ganon then went to claim the Triforce.

09 March 2021

Stargate Reimagined


Stargate '94 has amazing costumes, sets, music, and lore, but weak writing and characterization. Stargate SG-1 has decent characterization and writing, but it feels like a Trek knockoff, complete with generic English-speaking extraterrestrial civilizations and technobabble. My ultimate dream is to craft a Stargate reboot which contains all the best elements of SG '94, SG-1, SGU, and the Bill McCay tie-in novels, with none of their worst.

I completed an SG '94 rewrite in 2016:


Written at the height of my postmodern phase, it’s a pretty thorough deconstruction of the original film (American imperialism doesn’t save the day; it gets an entire world killed.). It was meant to be the first part of a trilogy, but shortly after starting on the sequel, development stalled; a casualty of the burnout I suffered while working on my Star Wars Prequel Trilogy rewrite at the time.

I never completely abandoned the project. I continued to brainstorm, write notes, etc. to lay the foundation for my personal Stargate universe.

  • Ra is Atum. I made this change because Atum is an older god than Ra, was worshipped earlier than Ra, and also because the pharaonic Ra of Stargate more closely resembles Atum than the hawk-headed Ra of myth.
  • Atum isn’t a Goa’uld. He's one of the Ancients, who in this universe were amoral gray-skinned reptilian humanoids who reigned in the Andromeda/Triangulum galaxies prior to their extinction. The Goa’uld are a separate, unrelated species native to the Milky Way who were conquered by Atum’s underlords some 5000 years after the Rebellion on Earth.
  • Atum has a minimum of fourteen underlords under him: Anpu (Anubis); Apis; Aset (Isis); Ausir (Osiris); Djehuti (Thoth); Hapi; Heru (Horus); Hut-Hor (Hathor); Khnum; Nekhbet; Ptah; Sebek; Sekhmet; and Wadjet. Each underlord serves a different function in maintaining the Imperium. When an underlord dies/abdicates/is ousted, their first prime takes their place, assuming their name and position.
  • Atum was originally a benevolent ruler. After 2000 years of rule, ennui drove him to relegate command of the Imperium to his underlords and go into seclusion. His underlords then turned the Imperium to a totalitarian state, inciting the failed Rebellions on Nubt and Abdju and the successful Rebellion on Earth. With the passage of 10,000 years and countless civil wars and regime changes, the Imperium has fragmented and ossilated between authoritarian and liberal governments.
  • The Goa’uld were genetically modified by Khnum to curtail their ability to reproduce and take hosts. Only a single fertile queen exists, and its offspring are incapable of growing to maturity. These neutered Goa’uld, known as "primtah", are placed within underlords and first primes, boosting their immune systems, resilency, and lifespans.
  • The Imperium consists of several hundred worlds concentrated within the Milky Way. Most are inhabited by humans and genetically engineered human offshoots, all descendants of peoples taken from North Africa in 10,000-8000 BCE.
  • A small number of non-human species joined the Imperium. The most notable of these was the Setim. A caninoid race native to Tuat, they agreed to provide Atum the technological infrastructure to build his empire in exchange for help repairing their planet’s damaged ecosystem. This arrangement was mutually beneficial at first, but following the underlords’ rise to power, the Setim were displaced from positions of influence and forcibly relocated to the ice planet Nubt. With the Rebellion on Nubt, the Setim were exterminated by Sekhmet. Disgusted by this and other atrocities committed by the Imperium, one of the first primes, Sutekh, went renegade. Wearing a helm fashioned after the Setim likeness, he established a revolutionary movement across the Imperium, culminating in the Rebellion on Earth.
  • The Apep are a species of giant tentacled serpents, former enemy of the Ancients, present enemy of the Imperium. They aren't nice guys.
  • Heru Guards wear retractable, full-body power armour; this armour is impervious to any terrestrial ordnance short of .50 caliber machine guns. Heru Guards are armed with over/under pulse rifles; the primary barrel discharges a plasma blast which can kill, the secondary barrel discharges an electrolaser which only stuns.
  • The staff weapon is a ceremonial weapon wielded by Nekhbet Guards alone.
  • The zat gun is a sidearm primarily carried by Wadjet Guards. One shot from a zat causes debilitating pain; two shots renders one unconscious; three shots are usually fatal.
  • The Imperium has developed lingual nanites. Injected within the language areas of the brain, they link the individual to a vast language database, enabling them to understand/speak/read/write any language stored within the database while also uploading any languages they know to the database. Daniel Jackson was injected with these nanites after being captured by Sekhmet’s forces during the Abdju Mission. Following Daniel’s return to Earth, some of these nanites were extracted and replicated, giving the SGC access to this technology.
  • FTL propulsion/communicators don’t exist. Conventional interstellar travel/communication is only possible through the stargate/supergate networks. Atum’s intergalactic voyage from his homeworld to Earth took 2.5 million years.
  • Stargate addresses consist of nine symbols each. Each address corresponds to an individual gate.
  • All stargates are semitranslucent black, with chevrons/engravings which glow white when active.
  • Stargate/supergate travel is two-way.
  • Apep stargates are simpler in design than Ancient stargates, triangular in shape, with no moving parts. Though utilizing the same wormhole physics, Ancient and Apep stargates aren't compatible without the application of an adapter.

27 January 2021

Friday the 13th Reimagined


A project I've long wanted to tackle is a reimagining of Friday the 13th. As a teen, I was a big fan of the series, particularly of the first five entries. As I grew older, I came to realize the series … wasn't good. The original is very likely the best, and it's still only a cynical cash-grab designed to capitalize off the success of Halloween. Still, I believe the bones of a good horror story are present beneath the fat.

My reimagining of F13 would be a tetralogy, a period piece spanning the '80s. Right from the start, Jason Voorhees would be established as a supernatural being, having drowned as a child in 1957 then returned to life a year later, corrupted into a psychopathic killing machine with enhanced strength/regenerative capabilities by a dark force living within Crystal Lake. Jason would be the primary antagonist for the first half of the series, then he'd be killed and replaced by Tommy Jarvis, who'd become possessed by the evil which inhabited Jason.

Friday the 13th 1980

Set in 11-14 June, 1980. A mashup of Parts I & II with a few elements from III, greater emphasis would be placed on characterization, particularly Alice’s, who'd be revealed as a single mother who abandoned her 3-year-old daughter to the care of her parents to start her life over. The primary antagonist would be Jason. Crippled by social anxiety, Jason would be incapable of assaulting anyone able to see his face, restricting him to stalking and sneak attacks. Only after obtaining his iconic goalie mask would he become the aggressive predator we're most familiar with. The secondary antagonist would be his mother, Pamela. She kept Jason in isolation since his resurrection, doing her best to protect him and others from him to diminishing returns. The film would finish with Alice setting fire to Jason and the Voorhees home, Pamela’s decapitation, and a depressing twist ending.

Friday the 13th 1984

Set in/around 13 April, 1984. A mashup of Parts III & IV. Rob would be reimagined as Alice's brother.

Friday the 13th 1985

Set in/around 13 September, 1985. A more-or-less faithful remake of A New Beginning. Most of the patients at Pinehearst would be deaged, including Tommy, who'd only be a year older than he was in the preceeding chapter. There'd be more scenes focused on Tommy, his mental deterioration, and his growing rapport with Pam. Roy wouldn't be the killer, but rather the director of Pinehearst, Matthew, who'd be revealed at the end as a sadistic psychopath who'd abused a number of kids in his care and had decided to advance to serial murder, using Tommy's past with Jason as a cover for his crimes.

Friday the 13th 1989

Set in/around 13 October, 1989. Tommy, now fully possessed by the evil he inherited from Jason, would return to Crystal Lake, renamed Forest Green in the years after the murders. Pursuing him would be his sister, Trish, who'd be desperate to find him and free him of Jason’s curse. She'd meet Elias Voorhees, Jason’s father, who'd reveal the truth of Crystal Lake to her, of the evil within the lake which corrupted Jason and moved into Tommy following Jason’s final death. He'd offer her the key to freeing Tommy, but there'd be an ulterior motive for his help; he'd believe Jason’s spirit lives on in Tommy, ready to return to his original body, which Elias secretly saved from cremation and had buried in a secret plot….

22 September 2019

If I Rebooted It (A Final Outline from an Ex-"Star Wars" Fan)

I wrestled with whether or not it was appropriate to post this, seeing as I've deleted almost all posts pertaining to Star Wars (an action I've since come to regret to an extent). In the end, I felt it would serve as a fair coda to my time as a Star Wars fanfic writer.

Right as my status as a SW fan was receiving last rites, I toyed with the idea of writing an entire Original Trilogy rewrite; I even typed out a few pages before my soured feelings put a kibosh on the whole deal. I no longer have those pages, having deleted them, but I did preserve the outline of ideas I had conceived in preparation.

So, with no further ado, my final dip into the SW sandbox, my vision for a SW OT reboot:

GENERAL CHANGES

  • My OT would be semi-hard science fiction, with a few fantastical elements, rather than outright science fantasy. Things like 3D space travel would be featured, but people walking around inside giant space slugs without spacesuits in Earth-normal gravity would be out of the question.
  • My OT would take place in the Milky Way Galaxy, in “the 33rd century A.E.”, hundreds of thousands of years into the future. Humans and near-humans would be the only sapient life inhabiting the galaxy; there’d be no genuine aliens.
  • Projectile weapons such as coilguns and smart missiles would be featured, with energy weapons taking lesser precedence.
  • The lightsaber would be somewhat different. It’d be a weapon only trained Force-users can activate and wield. It’d possess a monomolecular blade of “energized particles” which can cut through most anything but doesn’t generate any actual heat. Jedi lightsabers would be red while Sith lightsabers blue.
  • No manned fighters. All fighters would either be outfitted with AIs (Empire) or remote controlled (Rebel).
  • There’d be no light/dark dichotomy to the Force.
  • No Force ghosts.

STAR WARS

  • Luke would be changed into a female character named “Leia Skywalker”.
  • Leia would become Princess Zara Antilles.
  • The Death Star would not make a physical appearance. Zara would be imprisoned on Vader’s Star Destroyer and all scenes pertaining to her rescue would take place there.
  • Ben would survive his duel with Vader.
  • The film would end with our heroes escaping for Hoth.

THE EMPIRE STRIKES BACK

  • My version of TESB would open a couple weeks after the events of SW. The damages to the Falcon would’ve been those sustained during our heroes’ escape from Vader’s ship; Leia would be furthering her training under Ben; etc.
  • Dodonna would take Rieekan’s place.
  • The Leia/Han/Zara love triangle would be a bisexual one.
  • The walkers would be replaced with tanks.
  • Ben would be slain by Vader while helping our heroes escape Hoth.
  • In contrast to Ben, Yoda would be quite the PT-era Jedi. He would teach Leia that Jedi are forbidden from forming attachments, including romantic ones.
  • Bespin wouldn’t have a breathable atmosphere.
  • Six months would explicitly pass between the Battle of Hoth and the duel on Cloud City.
  • I’m on the fence as to whether Vader would be Leia’s father or not.
  • Leia would join Vader.

REVENGE OF THE JEDI

  • Three years would’ve passed since TESB. Leia would’ve spent that time receiving Sith training from Vader.
  • The one and only Death Star would finally make its debut.
  • Motti would take Jerjerrod’s place.
  • Emperor Palpatine would be reimagined as Espaa Valorum, the beautiful, androgynous, ageless Dark Lord of the Sith.
  • Under his helmet, Vader would be revealed as a handsome middle-aged man without any injuries or disfigurements.
  • No Ewoks, no Endor. The Rebel fleet would attack the Death Star above Had Abbadon, and we’d get a trench run much like the one from A New Hope. No muss, no fuss.
  • Valorum would zap Leia with his lightning; Vader would skewer him on his lightsaber; then Leia and Vader would have their climactic duel.
  • Leia would slay Vader à la Dooku. Vader would die in his sins, unredeemed.
  • The film would end on a bittersweet note, with the Death Star destroyed, Han and Zara together, and Leia assuming command of the Executor and going off on her own, intent on building a First Order free of Jedi/Sith dogma.

22 September 2018

Star Trek: The Companion Series

After watching TOS for the first time several years ago, I was left with the desire to create my own non-Kelvin Timeline reboot for the Star Trek Universe. It wasn't because I thought the show was bad – far from it – but because I felt the series, in spite of its strong characters and stories, never really realized its full potential, hampered as it was by storytelling conventions and SFX limitations of 1960s television.

In 2015-2016, I wrote the pilot episode for a hard reboot of TOS which was to consist of five seasons with 22 episodes each. It didn't take long for me to realize writing 110 episodes would be too daunting a task for me to tackle alone, and so abandoned the idea after completing that one pilot script.

I've since returned to the pilot and revised it to bring it more in-line with established Trek lore, though still kept it distinct from the Prime Universe. I then began thinking about the ideas I'd conceived for my abandoned hard reboot, wondering how they might work incorporated into a soft reboot/interquel/sidequel series instead.

Though I'll never say never, it's unlikely I'll ever get back aboard the Enterprise. In lieu of a series proper, here's Star Trek: The Companion Series (The Treatment):

NATURE OF THE REBOOT

This'd be a companion to TOS, and as such I'd try telling my stories without overturning too much established continuity. That said, elements perceived as outdated/silly/bad would be jettisoned/altered as the need arose. Also, my faithfulness to canon would end at TOS itself; aside from TWOK, I'd ignore all the movies/spinoffs.

Unlike TOS, The Companion Series would be more serialized in nature, an ensemble series chronicling the first five-year mission from beginning to end, with ongoing story/character arcs, with 16 episodes per season (8-10 for ongoing storylines, 6-8 for multi-part/standalone stories). There'd also be a stable of recurring characters.

IN THE 23RD 28TH CENTURY

The Federation feels to me too young/too close in time to our own era for its level of technological development to be plausible. Add to that the 1990s date for the Eugenics Wars, and I feel an older Federation/Federation set further into the future would be preferable. I'd shift the TOS era as far into the future as I could without straining continuity to the breaking point — the 28th century. Likewise, the Eugenics Wars would be shifted to the 26th century.

HUMANS, NEAR-HUMANS, HUMANOIDS, & ALIENS

I'm not fond of the TNG episode "The Chase" or its silly "directed panspermia" explanation for why most Trek aliens are rubber forehead aliens. I much prefer the theory expounded in "The Paradise Syndrome", that these human/rubber forehead aliens are the descendants of people (most likely Terrans) seeded across the galaxy by an advanced alien race. For this series, I'd return to that older idea. Vulcans, Klingons, Orions, etc. would be retconned as genetically modified near-human offshoots.

Humanoid species such as the Saurians, Caitians, Kzinti, etc. would be retconned as descendants of terrestrial non-human animals, creations of the same aliens who influenced human evolution and seeded humanity across the stars.

Actual aliens — non-humanoid entities like the Horta, Excalbians, Kelvans, etc. — would make appearances in this series, but their appearances would be rare. The third season would be the only season to make regular use of them.

VULCANS & ROMULANS

The Vulcans and Romulans would receive a shared redesign:


As a half-human, Spock would remain untouched, but all full-blooded Vulcans/Romulans would receive forehead ridges, green skin, "green-in-green" eyes, and even greenish bones and teeth.

Because Vulcans/Romulans would be retconned as human offshoots, their biochemistry/anatomy would be changed to reflect this. No longer would they have copper-based blood or hearts where their livers should be. Their blood would remain green, but as with green-blooded skinks, this colouration would be the result of high biliverdin levels in their bodies. They'd be essentially human otherwise, making their capability to produce viable offspring with Homo sapiens plausible.

New aspects of Vulcan culture would be explored. It'd be revealed there're Vulcan colonies/individuals who're more liberal in their expression of Surakean philosophy than mainstream Vulcans or don't follow Surakean philosophy at all.

It'd be established that the Romulan Star Empire's cosmopolitan, with non-Romulans serving in the military, mirroring the Federation/Starfleet.

KLINGONS

The Klingons would be established as eugenicists who maintain a strict caste system consisting of four primary castes — the warrior, scholar, merchant, and worker castes — with centuries of genetic engineering/selective breeding evolving them into distinct subspecies. A lesser "under-caste" would also exist, consisting of disgraced, disabled, mixed caste, and mutant Klingons who have no status or rights in the Klingon Empire.

WEAPONS & TECHNOLOGY

The transporter became too much of a crutch and deus ex machina, especially once TNG rolled around. To place limitations on what transporters can do, I'd portray them operating only in tandem with other transporters and only as transporters.

The original warp scale would be used and strictly adhered to. The Enterprise wouldn't be able to make quick trips from the frontier to the heart of the Federation and back again by conventional warp travel.

The communicator and tricorder would be combined into a single device, the "comcorder".

The disintegration setting would be removed from phasers. Only disruptors would have that power.

UNIFORMS

STARFLEET UNIFORMS (SEASON 1)


(commissioned officers)


(enlisted personnel)

STARFLEET UNIFORMS (SEASONS 2-5)


(commissioned officers)


(enlisted personnel)

STARFLEET UNIFORMS (MIRROR UNIVERSE)


(commissioned officers)


(enlisted personnel)

  • Gold – command
  • Blue – sciences
  • Light blue – medical
  • Beige – operations
  • Red – security
  • Silver – cadets/trainees

Only commanding/first officers would wear command gold.


Gray jumpsuits would be standard landing party garb, substituted with EV suits/body armour in more hazardous environments.

SEASON 1


(This'd be Janice Rand's hairdo for the season.)

Season 1 would have no central arc. This season would be about introducing the universe and getting to know the characters.

The pilot, "To Boldy Go", is a partial adaptation of both Enterprise: The First Adventure and "All Those Years Ago".

From this point forward, I'm going to assume you've read "To Boldy Go". If you haven't, I suggest you do so before continuing.

The second episode would be an adaptation of "Uhura's Story".

One episode would be "Sister in Space".

One episode would be a remake of "The Alternative Factor". This episode would set up a mini-arc for Season 2.

One episode would be a flashback episode exploring Rand's childhood as a Klingon slave.

It'd be revealed Kirk's an Ahmadi Muslim.

It'd be revealed Uhura's Ethiopian Orthodox.

Lt. Kyle and Spock would be brief love interests of Uhura's.

It'd be revealed Piper's a homosexual who'd been married to a Vulcan man.

Rand's insomnia would persist through the season. For reasons unknown, she wouldn't visit Piper to determine the cause of her sleeplessness. Instead, with fellow crewman Lt. LeBeque as go-between, she'd meet Beckwith, another crewman who'd supply her with illegal sleep-substitute drugs.

The "handsome female lieutenant with short blond hair" mentioned in "To Boldy Go" would be revealed as Elizabeth Dehner. She'd be a recurring character and Mitchell's love interest throughout the season.

The penultimate episode would be a remake of "The City on the Edge of Forever". It'd stick closer to Harlan Ellison's original draft. In this episode, it'd be established the Trek Universe adheres completely to a "growing block universe" concept of time.

The season finale would be a remake of "Where No Man Has Gone Before". Piper would die in this episode.

SEASON 2


(Rand would switch to her (in)famous "wicker basket" hairdo.)

This season would feature the series' first seasonal arc: the re-emergence of the Romulans and the creation of their alliance with the Klingons.

The season premiere would be "Bound in a Nutshell, the King of Infinite Space", a semi-adaptation of Enterprise: The First Adventure. McCoy would join the crew as of this episode. This'd be the first episode to feature genuine sapient aliens.

Christine Chapel would come aboard the Enterprise.

Kirk and Rand would become lovers.

Halfway through the season, Rand would develop a split personality. Rand would be revealed as a spy for the Klingons, brainwashed while in captivity then set free to infiltrate Starfleet, with her insomnia a symptom of her true personality re-emerging. "True" Rand would reassert command of her body and "false" Rand — the Rand who'd fallen in love with Kirk — would cease to exist. Under order of Starfleet Command, she'd depart the Enterprise to undergo a thorough psychological evaluation, leaving the series.

Chekov would join the crew as one of the Enterprise's security officers.

Chekov's illusory brother, Piotr, would be retconned as a real flesh-&-blood sibling who was killed by Klingons prior to his joining the Enterprise. Chekov's bitter hatred toward Klingons would figure heavily into his character arc.

Chekov and Ruan would become friends.

One episode would be a retelling of "Space Seed" told from Chekov's POV.

"The Naked Time" and "Tomorrow Is Yesterday" would be remade as the first two parts of a three-episode mini-arc. The third part, "A Reflection Refracted", would be an original story of the Enterprise stranded in the Mirror Universe.

SEASON 3

This season's arc: the Federation, Klingons, and Romulans cooperating to stop a forthcoming Kelvan invasion of the Milky Way.

The season premiere would be a remake of "Amok Time". The opening would recap the events of "Operation: Annihilate!", retconning the ending so Spock would still be blind from the events of that episode, necessitating the temporary use of a VISOR. The Enterprise would be too far out of range to make the trip to Vulcan; Spock would use "astral projection" technology to visit his homeworld instead.

A new recurring character would be introduced: a "liberal" Vulcan female crewman of the Enterprise. This character would become a love interest for Spock. She may or may not be eventually revealed as a Romulan double agent.

The Kelvans and the enigmatic "Old Ones" mentioned in "What Are Little Girls Made Of?" and "Catspaw" would be established as one and the same.

Chekov would join the bridge crew.

Chekov and Sulu would start off as rivals but evolve into friends.

Chekov and Ruan would become lovers.

One episode would be "Deep Mudd".

One episode would be an adaptation of "Cloak & Dagger".

One episode would be a remake of "The Trouble with Tribbles", including cameos of Benjamin Sisko, Jadzia Dax, Miles O'Brien, Julian Bashir, Worf, & Odo from the DS9 episode "Trials and Tribble-ations". At the end, it'd be revealed Ruan's a surgically altered Klingon spy.

Spock's natural eyesight would be restored near season's end.

The season finale would have Ruan's true nature revealed to the Enterprise crew, much to Chekov's shock and dismay. She'd leave the Enterprise and return to the Klingons thereafter.

SEASON 4

This season's arc: McCoy makes peace with the universe as he slowly succumbs to xenopolycythemia.

The season premiere would be a remake of "For the World is Hollow and I Have Touched the Sky" (minus the deus ex machina ending).

One episode would be "Portrait in Black and White".

One episode would be "Castles in the Sky", a remake of "The Cloud Minders".

One episode would be an adaptation of "The Real McCoy".

One episode would be an adaptation of "Past Imperfect".

It'd be revealed McCoy's a lapsed Christian whose father was a minister.

The season finale would have McCoy finding a cure for his xenopolycythemia and Chekov leaving the Enterprise.

SEASON 5

Like Season 1, this season would have no central arc. This season would be all about tying up loose ends.

Arex and M'Ress would come aboard the Enterprise.

Mira Romaine would be a recurring character.

The season premiere would be an adaptation of "Strange New Worlds".

The second episode would be a remake of the TAS episode "Yesteryear".

One episode would be an adaptation of "The Planet of No Return", reimagined as a Mirror Universe tale. Mirror Rand would make her first and only appearance here.

The third-&-second-to-last episodes would be a two-part remake of Star Trek V: The Final Frontier. Sha Ka Ree would be reimagined as a pocket universe accessible only through "Heaven's Gate". This two-parter would conclude with Spock making a solemn pledge to undergo the Kolinahr ritual and finally shed himself of his humanity.

The series finale would be "In Thy Image", a remake of Star Trek: The Motion Picture and "The Changeling". Chekov and Ruan would replace Decker and Ilia. The series would conclude with Spock and Chapel becoming lovers.